The solution structure for this essay:
“Some people believe that culture and traditions will be destroyed by the money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others think it is the only way to save these cultures and traditions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.”
should look like this:
There are 3 questions that must be addressed:
- How do the money making attractions aimed at tourists damage culture and traditions?
- How do they help in protecting culture and traditions?
- What is your own opinion on the issue?
The first step, after deciding how many questions you must answer, is to decide what your position on the issue is. Your actual position doesn’t matter, except that you must have one. Having a position tells you how to structure your essay logically and it will lead to a clearer essay that does not suffer the confusion, and often the contradictions that occur, in essays that try to give a totally balanced view.
Topic Sentence for the First Body Paragraph. (this is the side you DO NOT agree with)
“To begin with, some people argue that culture and traditions are damaged/(protected and preserved) by the attractions which are designed to pull tourists in to an area.”
This wording implies that this is what “some people argue” – it is not the writer’s opinion. However, this allows the writer to raise some of the arguments on the other side without confusing the reader about whether it is their own opinion or not.
Topic Sentence for the Second Body Paragraph. (this is the side YOU AGREE with)
“Nevertheless, the protection and preservation of/ (damage to) culture and traditions resulting from developments intended to support tourism is immeasurable.”
This is a very clear statement of where the writer stands. The writer used the word “immeasurable” – this is a very strong word and the implication is that the writer believes there are so many arguments on this side that they are actually beyond measure. It signals a very strong opinion.
In addition, the second sentence of a two sentence introduction will clearly show the writer’s opinion and the first sentence of a two sentence conclusion will repeat (in different words) this same sentence and again reinforce what the writer believes.
As an example, suppose I am on the side that agrees that tourism can protect culture if managed carefully. The second sentence of my introduction might read:
“Although tourism and the attractions that surround it may be a threat to culture and traditions in some situations, there is overwhelming evidence that, managed carefully, tourism not only protects and preserves indigenous culture and traditions, but can also be the source of enormous feelings of pride in local people.”
If this looks too difficult, here is a much simpler version:
“Although money spinning tourist attractions may damage culture and traditions in some situations, there is absolutely no doubt that the protection they offer is far more significant.”
Don’t try to write the more difficult sentences unless your grammar knowledge will let you do it without making errors. This simpler sentence is still a subordinate clause structure and can score all the way to Band 9 depending what other sentences I use and how accurately I get the grammar.